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Topic: the dreams  (Read 1595 times)
« on: April 10, 2008, 08:03:21 AM »
alannah Offline
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these are the dreams that i have

this is the hope
that fans the dreams
that i have

this is the family
that demands the hope
that fans the dreams
that i have

this is the love
that comes from the family
that supports the hope
that gives life to the dreams
that i have.
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« on: April 17, 2008, 08:38:29 AM »
michaela Offline
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Lana, your too hard on yourself.. I loved the impact of "demands the hope" .. made me go yes I now what you mean .. but to see it transformed into "supports the hopes" also made me go yes I now what you mean in a more fulfulling way, a more accurate way. If this is the starter looking forward to the next.
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